Motivation, resilience, optimism, self-control, flexibility, etc. are attributes often associated with emotional intelligence. Choose one of these and discuss why it is an important trait for a fulfilling life.
Motivation is an important trait for a fulfilling life. Motivation can be defined as a concept used to describe the factors within an individual which arouse, maintain and channel behaviors towards a goal. Why motivation is so important? Firstly, motivation might help people to achieve their goals. Taking the college students as an example, the methods of education are different between the university and secondary school. There are no more spooned feeds for the students after they go into the university. So they can not rely on their parents and teachers any more, self motivation is what they need at most of the time during their college study. For them, the motivation might be to get the good academic results, to learn more knowledge, to get the compliments from their parents and teachers. With those motivations, students will tell themselves to study hard, to plan their study systematically and to learn knowledge more eagerly.
Secondly, motivation might help people in their career. Nowadays, a lot of companies provide the incentive system to encourage their employees to be more effective and efficiency. The motivation for the employees is to get the incentive. Under this motivation, they might go for some training courses to get themselves well trained, get to know more about what they are doing and to figure out how to do the job effectively. Motivation is the reason behind their actions which causes them to react or act in the way they do. In conclusion, as one of the factor of emotional intelligence, motivation plays an important role in people lives.
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Thank you, Ma Li, for a detailed discussion. I like your development here and the use of definitions, reformulation and examples.
One commennt about sentence structure. You write:
"So they can not rely on their parents and teachers any more, self motivation is what they need at most of the time during their college study."
Do you see the problem?
Hi brad, i think the problem might be the sentence not flows smoothly and the transition word missing inbetween. Am i right?
I would use a different subordinating conjunction to start the first sentence: Because they can not rely on their parents and teachers anymore, self motivation is what they need most of the time during their college study.
That would work.
p.s. You can call me Brad if you like, but it sounds very informal. You could call me Mr. Blackstone but that sounds way too formal. (I've never liked being called that.) As I said, in Japan, using my two initials, students called me BB-sensei, and I liked that. What would be the Chinese equivalent?
it would be BB-laoshi, laoshi= sensei=teacher , so can i call you BB laoshi?
That would be cool, if it's okay with you.
THANKS!
I feel that your paragraph is well organized and follows basic general-to-specific organization. You are well done in this part.
However, there are still parts which you can make some improvement. For example, “Under this motivation, they might go for some training courses to get themselves well trained”; I suggested using “them” instead of “themselves”.
You write: " With those motivations, students will tell themselves to study hard, to plan their study systematically and to learn knowledge more eagerly."
Using "themselves" is correct.
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